Each time I think of writing an Hourglass, I feel that it’s unfair to proceed without giving credit to this beautiful person who created the metric. While a lot of us struggle to follow metric, this man created one! Thank you Bushka (click here to read his poetry; (this is currently my favourite poem of his but you should choose yours…read the mini-monos too, I think they are lovely!)
Puddle:-
Puddle, Reflecting Emotions so Strong
images,colours, familiarity Abound
Through unspoken words
They shared
Dreams!
While
Another friend
Flicked stone disrupting
Reflections, satisfying his erupting
Temper, encouraging Dreams Spilling Over!
*****
This time I have stuck to the appropriate metric, I hope! 😉
If you haven’t tried writing and Hourglass yet, give it a shot!
PS: I wrote this one at least 5 times to make it look and sound like an Hourglass. I don’t know how good a job I have done..Why don’t you tell me? 🙂
aishwaryasivakumar 
Aish,
Definitely a wonderful poem! You are the best disciple of master Elliot.
🙂 Dajena ❤
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Aww thank you Dajena! This comment comes to me like a breath of fresh air. I haven’t been able to log on to the site much these days. But this is the first thing I’m reading today and I feel humbled 🙂
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its very lovely
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I’m so glad you liked it.
Have a lovely day…heading over to yours soon 🙂
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Aww np. Thank you!
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I think it’s beautiful, well-done, Friend!
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Thank you so much for stopping by Ann! And thank you for your encouragement. I’m glad you are a part of my blogging journey 🙂
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Me too, my biggest pleasure!
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Well done!!!!! And, it’s beautiful.
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Thank you, lovely soul! Bushka is to thank – he inspired me to try writing Hourglasses 🙂
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It’s a good fit for you 🙂
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It’s a lovely poem , Aishwarya . Keep at it 🙂
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Thank you so much 🙂 it feels great to know when someone visits and also feels their time was worth the visit.
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It’s so nice to read fresh poems from bright minds 🙂
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Wow that’s a generous thing to say about me! Thank you so much 🙂
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Excellent, Aish! You certainly mastered the shape of the Hourglass…maintaining a flow of thoughts with vivid imagery….
If you really want to go the whole way…you will have to get the syllable count right in each line…
First line……5 syllables
Second line.4 syllables
Third line…..3 syllables
Fourth line…2 syllables
Fifth line……1 syllable..
Sixth line…..1 syllable…
7th….2 syllables
8th….3 syllables
9th….4 syllables
10th..5 syllables..
This can be quite a challenge..
Thanks for liking my format…and poetry….I feel honoured….
Hugs! ❤
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Ah Bushka… Yet another challenge! I’ll try to get that right the next time 😉 that ensures I write an hourglass before long! 🙂
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You WILL…. I’m sure! The format could suit your style…. 😉 Hugs! ❤
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Thank you Bushka!
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Hugs!
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Thanks for introducing me to hourglass. I shall try it soon! Light and love, Shona
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I’m glad you liked the format too! Will look forward to seeing one soon on your blog. Cheers!
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Please, do! 🙂
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Beautiful! It looks and reads great… Thanks for sharing Bushka’s blog…will visit it… 🙂
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Thanks for stopping by M!
And I’m sure he’ll be happy to have you over 🙂
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Yes… he has a great blog… 🙂
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Great and beautiful job. You are a worthy emissary 🙂
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Thank you for your generous compliment J!! It’s always lovely to hear from you 🙂
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I loved it,it’s so beautifully written.Keep going.
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Thank you so much for visiting. I’m so happy to hear you enjoyed the post! Cheers
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